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Children’s Day is located onevery year of 4th October. Every Children’s Day , my school’sscience club will have a trip to celebrate Children’s Day. It’s purpose is tolet student relax. There is no except for this year, our science club haveorganized a trip to National Science center and Morib Beach.

Whenwe arrived at National Science Centre, there are many amazing sciencetechnicque that made us be awesome. We took lot of photographs in the NationalScience Centre. We were exploring the secret centre with a guard. Whenever wegot some confusion, the guard will help us to explain to what we confused. Theguard‘s explaining promoted our understanding and we learned a lot of knowledgewhich is about Science and Technology.

In theNational Science Centre, there are several of science part ,such as electronicpart, galaxy part and so on. We have only chosen to explore the galaxy partbecause of the lack of time. We used a very big telescope to take a look to theouter space. We write down what we saw in the big telescope as our references tostudy. After that, we enter to a unique theatre .It‘s look like a real Galaxy,but it actually is a simulation of galaxy. When you enter it, you will felttraveling in outer space.

In Morib,we have a picnic as our lunch. We bought a lot of
cheap material for our picnic. During thepicnic, some student swam in sea until exhausted. We got a wonderful time atthere.

At
the evening, we finished the trip, we learnedlot of knowledge that is about outer space.We also knew the felling abouttraveling in space. Students also have a happy Children’s Day. Finally,We got the goal!

一看到那么烂的grammar就冷心zzz

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