请帮忙更正我的英文

mg66

我的一些朋友经常使用不正确的英文， 我很想更正他们。所以我借了这里的版块来跟大家研究研究。我将会贴一些不正确的句子来请大家帮忙提供意见。
如果大家对任何英文有疑问，也可以把它贴在这里。

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mg66

请大家帮忙改这一句：

I still remembered when I was teenage, my friend chase my schoolmate, his gf needs every day call her says love you 5 times, sms many time(forgot how many), if he late to replies her phone call, he will "judging" by gf. My friend really pitiful

雷Leong

进来看看下。小弟的英语非常差，常被酸到够够。。。

来见识下： “his gf needs every day call her says love you 5 times,” 改为 he needs to call with her to says: "I love you" in 5 times per day?

可以吗？

mg66

进来看看下。小弟的英语非常差，常被酸到够够。。。

来见识下： “his gf needs every day call her say ...
雷Leong 发表于 16-2-2011 04:18 PM

原文：
I still remembered when I was teenage, my friend chase my schoolmate, his gf needs every day call her says love you 5 times, sms many time(forgot how many), if he late to replies her phone call, he will "judging" by gf. My friend really pitiful
   
我来试试更正：

I still remember when I was a teenager (或， I remember during my teenage), my friend's girl friend wanted him to call her everyday and say, "I love you", to sms her many times. If he was late in replying her phone call, he would be "judged" by his girl friend. My firend was really pity.


当然，我的更正还不是很完美，希望还有人可以编制更好的句子。不知道这个judge 是什么意思。如果是惩罚的话，应该用"punished"。

注：

my friend chase my schoolmate 就省略了。因为你说的时候他们已经是情侣了。如果你说他追求她，更加正确的是courting, 我怀疑chase 在英语没有追求的意思。是追赶的意思。

mg66

"he needs to call with her to says: "I love you" in 5 times per day"

  如果你说的是现在式(present tense)，你就应该这么说：

He needs to call her 5 times a day to say "I love you".

你说的call with her 的with 就没有必要或是错的。如果你说call with her 的意思就是跟她一起打电话。你现在说的是他给她打电话。意思就不一样啦。。

雷Leong

原文：
I still remembered when I was teenage, my friend chase my schoolmate, his gf needs every ...
mg66 发表于 16-2-2011 05:41 PM

如果是woo来表达追求（女孩）呢？

mg66

如果是woo来表达追求（女孩）呢？
雷Leong 发表于 16-2-2011 08:31 PM

意思也差不多，woo 是比较口语的用法。

风满楼

reply to a letter/an email/a phone call
本地人常会写成 reply a letter/an email/a phone call

风满楼

My firend was really pity.

没见过pity这样用，要说可怜那个朋友的话：
I feel/felt really sorry for my friend.

可怜或同情一个人，可以说：
feel sorry for ...
feel sympathy for...
take pity on ...
pity ...
等等......

雷Leong

今天拿了人家2手的家具，意外发现到一张小女孩给妈妈的道歉寄卡：

I envy the times where brother was able to get the hyper attention from you during my age where you were much younger. I guess I cannot accept the vast difference in the relationship. Things have changed a lot and fast compared to the way it was between between us last time.

However, I do still want to keep my distance as well, because I realised that the closer I am to you, and when I get disappointed, if hurts much more than it should.

那个hyper attention可以改去much吗？例如much attention

新加坡的小妹妹果然英文一流

mg66

没见过pity这样用，要说可怜那个朋友的话：
I feel/felt really sorry for my friend.

可怜或同情一个 ...
风满楼 发表于 16-2-2011 09:53 PM

谢谢你。。pity 是noun。我错误的把它当adjective 用了。

mg66

今天拿了人家2手的家具，意外发现到一张小女孩给妈妈的道歉寄卡：

I envy the times where brother was  ...
雷Leong 发表于 16-2-2011 09:55 PM

   这个要请教风满楼。。
改去much attention似乎达不到小女孩的意思。。

风满楼

这个要请教风满楼。。
mg66 发表于 16-2-2011 10:00 PM

哈哈，你的贴当然是你来负责。

风满楼

应该不是小女孩了，
其实并不一流，看到我“头公公”，须要靠一些猜测才可以了解她的意思，
也不像道歉，更像是抗议、投诉、伸冤或谴责......

mg66

哈哈，你的贴当然是你来负责。
风满楼 发表于 16-2-2011 10:03 PM

我都说要大家帮忙咯。。我一时想不起要怎样改。

mg66

可以研究一下，能不能在这个句子用：

http://www.answers.com/topic/hyper-attention

Hyper attention is a cognitive style due to a generational shift in youngsters, therefore, having a short attention span, needing a high level of stimulation, which will enable the thought process without boredom. Hence, the stimulation comes from a source of networked or programmable media. According to N. Katherine Hayles, "Hyper attention is characterized by switching focus rapidly among different tasks, preferring multiple information streams, seeking a high level of stimulation, and having a low tolerance for boredom."[1]

雷Leong

应该不是小女孩了，
其实并不一流，看到我“头公公”，须要靠一些猜测才可以了解她的意思，
也不像道歉， ...
风满楼 发表于 16-2-2011 10:06 PM

因为太长，整个卡片写完

开头写：

Dear mother, sorry for the things I've said. Recently things have not been so great for me and I really needed a listing from you but I didn't get it.

And I also felt that things are not the same anymore, I guess this is the transition stage of me growing up and you parenting me at this stage.

I just wish that the age gap would be a little smaller between us.

这些是以上的前句子

mg66

因为太长，整个卡片写完

开头写：

Dear mother, sorry for the things I've said. Recently th ...
雷Leong 发表于 16-2-2011 10:11 PM

句子也有些错误。。你抓到吗？

雷Leong

句子也有些错误。。你抓到吗？
mg66 发表于 16-2-2011 10:12 PM

哦，我懂了^^